Monday, August 6, 2012

In Which I Brag About My CP

So, y'all know how Mark O'Brien is my critique partner, right? Yes? No? He's probably tired of me singing his praises now, but he's going to have to deal with it. So, backstory. I wrote a short story for the TCWT blog chain (which will be posted on Saturday, so...stay tuned), and asked him to look it over before I posted it on the interwebz and made an utter fool of myself, and his critique was so brilliant that I decided I absolutely couldn't let it fade away in my inbox.  YAY!!! (Oh, and if you guess the spoofed song, the singer, and the big Hollywood production that used it as background music for its trailer a few months ago, leave your answer in the comments and you'll get a virtual cookie). 

There I was again tonight
Forcing laughter, faking smiles
Same old tired, lonely booooks
Walls of insincerity
Shifting eyes and vacancy
Vanished when I saw your SS
All I can say is it was
Enchanting to read you

Your email whispered "Have you read?"
Tripping up the stairs, your short story
Starts to make its way to meee
The playful blurb-reading starts
Counter all your quick remarks like
Passing SSs in secrecy

And it was enchanting to read you
All I can say is I was enchanted to read you

This story is sparkling
Don't you let it go
I'm wonderstruck
Reading all the way home
I'll spend forever
Wondering if you knew
I was enchanted to read youuuu

The lingering question kept me up
Two A.M., why you so good?
I wonder 'til I'm wide awake
Now I'm pacing back and forth
Wishing your story was on my lap
I'd open it up and it would say
"Heeeey"
It was enchanting to read you
All I know is I was enchanted to read youuuuu!

This story is sparkling
Don't you let it go
I'm wonderstruck
Reading all the way home
I'll spend forever
Wondering if you knew
That this story is flawless
Don't you let it go
I'm wonderstruck
Reading around all alone
I'll spend forever wondering if you knew
I was enchanted to read you

And this is me praying that
This was the very first page
Not where the storyline ends
My thoughts will echo Icarus's name
Until Daedalus sees him again
These are the words I held back
As I was done reading too soon
I was enchanted to read you

Please don't be in love with some other story
Please don't not expand this one (I'm waiting on you)
Please don't be in love with some other story
Please don't not expand this one (I'm waiting on you)
Please don't be in love with some other story
Please don't not expand this one (I'm waiting on you)

This story is sparkling
Don't you let it go
I'm wonderstruck
Reading all the way home
I'll spend forever
Wondering if you knew
This story is flawless
Don't you let it go
I'm wonderstruck
Reading around all alone
I'll spend forever wondering if you knew

(Please don't be in love with some other story)
(Please don't not expand this one (I'm waiting on you))


*bawls* Is he not brilliant? IS HE NOT??? Gah. I was smiling so hard when this appeared in my inbox.

4 comments:

  1. XD IT WAS WORTH WAITING FOR.

    Seriously, that's cool. I kind of want to parody some songs now. But for now I'll just read this one again...

    And I look forward to seeing your SS!

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  2. Aww. Can I steal him for a bit (in a totally non-creepy 30 yr old needing a song parody about her writing sort of way)? Ok, that sounded weird.

    Congrats on your SS, by the way!

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  3. Enchanted! By Taylor Swift! <3 <3 <3 her stuff :D Although I don't know what movie trailer you're talking about... I would very much like to know!

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    1. Yay! Virtual cookie for you! And it's The Vow--I only added that in there because I thought it would be too easy otherwise XD

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