tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post8411956908863583853..comments2023-03-22T22:30:29.368-05:00Comments on A Story of a Dreamer: A Short Story by Yours TrulyAmy Zhanghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09044544447034004728noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-37426704750123639282012-08-13T23:09:28.382-05:002012-08-13T23:09:28.382-05:00OH MY GOD AMY. OH MY GOD.
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...OH MY GOD AMY. OH MY GOD. <br /><br />I...<br /><br />I...<br /><br />I just...<br /><br /><br />You are so good you make me want to give up writing. Yeah. So thanks for making me feel bad about myself.<br /><br />JK. (Not really.)<br /><br />This was awesome. Especially the last line. John Hansenhttp://www.twitter.com/aboredauthornoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-61440616315486591632012-08-12T07:41:47.839-05:002012-08-12T07:41:47.839-05:00Wow. Normally I can't stand present tense, bu...Wow. Normally I can't stand present tense, but this was so beautiful I didn't even care. Well done!Lily J.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08517974784100159005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-92223787663204108192012-08-12T07:09:27.676-05:002012-08-12T07:09:27.676-05:00This is wonderful! You're going to put the res...This is wonderful! You're going to put the rest of the chain to shame, I expect. Certainly me (as I am cheating and bending the rules and generally being a terrible person because my writing has corrupted me). I love the way you write :)Miriam Joyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10516402325473855925noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-50579993435719592172012-08-11T23:09:52.369-05:002012-08-11T23:09:52.369-05:00Poor Icarus… ='(
This is one of my favorite G...Poor Icarus… ='(<br /><br />This is one of my favorite Greek myths! =D And your interpretation is <i>phenomenal</i>—so beautiful! Great voice and emotion and imagery and…and…<i>things</i>. Loved it so much. *^_^*Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08849828724797164198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-87377608082926020882012-08-11T22:39:35.080-05:002012-08-11T22:39:35.080-05:00I love the story of Icarus! It's always been ...I love the story of Icarus! It's always been one of my favorites, because of the tragedy. I like tragedy. AND I really like THIS. =)<br /><br />I'mma just be a grammar Nazi real fast. XD Extra word here—"shove it in [my] his direction", missing word here—"but because [he] knows how to take broken", maybe get rid of 'away' repetition here by changing 'away' to 'way'—"or the wings will give [away]", and maybe get rid of 'me' repetition by taking out 'of me' here—"for there are suns on either side [of me]". Anyway. BEAUTIFUL. *sheds single tear*-https://www.blogger.com/profile/10117900591201766114noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-52575654821830322702012-08-11T21:03:40.391-05:002012-08-11T21:03:40.391-05:00This story was beautiful... not a single extraneou...This story was beautiful... not a single extraneous word, every emotion packed in there, and such a perfect explanation for what always seemed like a fairly silly story.Morgan Hydehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14015982745505112813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-78195090754587548402012-08-11T17:17:31.511-05:002012-08-11T17:17:31.511-05:00So poetic! I love this! First glimpse into your wr...So poetic! I love this! First glimpse into your writing! Okay, I'll stop with the exclamation points. But first! This is amazing! Okay. I will really stop now.alice-janehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05166049861400325499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-6544810435124824282012-08-11T16:41:05.461-05:002012-08-11T16:41:05.461-05:00Wow. This is simply gorgeous.
I prefer your inter...Wow. This is simply gorgeous.<br /><br />I prefer your interpretation to the original. :-)Amandahttp://amandamccrina.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7228176777685402862.post-70168981749494853462012-08-11T14:04:49.513-05:002012-08-11T14:04:49.513-05:00The way you write it, it sounds like Icarus was lo...The way you write it, it sounds like Icarus was lost in his moment of freedom. <br />" Not the leather touch of guards. But the calloused, dry touch of my father, roughened by dreams and failures."<br /><br />"This is why we are here—not for my father’s genius, nor his deceit, but because knows how to take broken things and make them beautiful."<br /><br />Seriously, you have a very poetic touch to your prose. I love these lines. You give so much with so little in them!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com